comment plz im really nervous. If u think its to confusing plz tell me

btw ill post chapter one tommorow evening

U have to post first before people wil lthink it is confusing

no im talking about the prolugue

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and i'm not that confused about the prologue, so post! ;) lolll

What the heck.


CHAPTER 1





Jace sat inside his dads car. He stared out the opened window at his old neighborhood. The luminous trees brustled as the wind blew. All the houses looked like they had been there for a long time. The air smelled of barbecue. Jace could see the kids playing in the park as his dad made a sharp right.
"Home sweet home! Aren't you excited?" his dad asked.
" Of course i am. hhmmm... I wonder who made us move away in the first place." I said sarcasticlly. Jace's dad looked at him through the rearview mirror with a sad face.
"I thought we went over this." Jace's dad said pleadingly as he made a left.
" We only moved because I had a job transfer. Anyways where home now at least".
"I know I just had a really hard time in new york. Your right I should be Happy."
"Great..." Jace's dad said quisically. He knew it was unusual for Jace to let up a conversation like this,but Jace didn't care he was just happy to be home.
They stopped and parked in the driveway in an old rundown house. The colors were completly saddening: black and gray. The front of the house had bricks that were out of place. The Windows were smudged to a point where you couldn't see through them. The weirdest thing was that there was no front door.
"This is NOT home." Jace said
"It is now. Now get out of the car and help me unpack." his dad said.





This is not the end of the first chapter.
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Omg I really need to space out my paragraphs

Post the rest of the chapter tomorrow evening guys

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ahhh! why not today? its only 10:52! well maby you dont live in PA..... or USA.......

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Continued



CHAPTER 1


After helping his dad unpack and settle down Jace went scouting for rooms. Jace had moved a lot in the past four years, so he knew which room would be the best. Most people wouldn't beleive this but sometimes the biggest rooms weren't always the best rooms.
As Jace climbed the stairs seemed to groan like they could give away at any second. He was relieved when he got to the top.
There was three doors on the left of the hallway. Jace walked straight to the closest one.
By the way the door creaked Jace knew the room was going to be terrible. He was so very wrong.
"Oh my gosh" Jace said mesmerized.
It was huge. The ceiling reached at least 20 feet high. Even though though there was no matress Jace could tell the bed frame was king sized. A few feet above the bed frame there was a shelf that ran across the wall. It looked like it was meant for pictures to be there. There was a small fireplace in the middle of the right wall. Out of all these things the best was the view.
The window was six feet by five feet. The blinds were pushed to the right so you could see outside. Jace walked closer. Now he saw the whole town. In back of that he saw the mountain range. Behind it the horizon gleamed colors of red, orange, yellow, green, and blue. Jace forgot how good it felt to be back home in Boulder.
Jace didn't bother checking the other rooms,but one place Jace knew he had to check for sure was the attic. Sometimes the people who lived in the house before you left things behind. Sometimes if you were lucky you could get cool expensive things like game systems or ipods.
Jace looked around for the attic. He couldn't find any sign of pull down stairs. He didn't understand the house was pretty tall. He knew it was really wierd that he couldn't find anything.
Then he saw it. A small square opening in the ceiling.
"Nice" Jace said.
Jace was tall for a 15 year old, so he reached for the string that was attatched to the small door.
"Jace come down here I want you to see this" yelled his dad from down stairs.
"Be right there" Jace yelled back.
When jace opened the door he got excited. There was ceiling behind it, but that was a good thing. It meant that there was really good stuff up there. Lucky for Jace he had been in this situation before.
Jace took off his shoe and through it at the ceiling. It busted right through.
He pulled down the stairs and climbed up. He gasped. There was weapons. Like real weapons. Swords, knives, guns all of that stuff.
The wierdest thing was a black crystal orb. It was radiant with purple tainted glow. Inside was a swirly black substance. Jace felt drawn to it. Like it was a part of him.
"Jace I mean it. Get over here right now!" his dad yelled.
Jace took one last shaky look and went down the steps.



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REALLY?! YAY! GRAMMA!!! MY GRAMMA ROCKS, BUT SHE GOT RAN OVER BY RAINDEER . . . THEY EVEN MADE A SONG ABOUT HER! HERE IT IS!

Gramma got ran over by a raindeer,
coming home from our house Christmas Eve.
You could say theres no such thing as Santa,
but as for me and gramma, we beleave!

THAT SONG IS JUST SOOOOO AWESOME!

U guys will really like the next chapter. Its about Percy

yeah go Percy!!

Heres a preview of chapter 2 I won't be posting until friday so I hope u can wait

Chapter 2

THE DARK ONES TALE
(you'll find out what "dark one" means later in the story)


Percy was betrayed by his family. He loved and cared for them, but they left him to rot in the end, even Annabeth. Your probably thinking how could Sally betray him also. The thing was she didn't.
Percy's mom had comitted suicide. After percy spent the weeks after mourning her he realized that his mother had a really good life at the moment she killed herself.
She had a wonderful son who kept her proud by saving Olympus time and time again. It wasn't like her being lonely was a problem. She had Paul to help her out. No, something much bigger was happening. After figuring that out Percy vowed to find out what it was.
Percy studied the place where she had died. Which killed him to be near the place where his mother's soul had been swept away. Percy had found two of his mother's necklaces that were given to her by Posieden. Nothing had been their to get the lead on how his mother died. Percy kept looking for days. Days turned into weeks and weeks turned into months. Still percy found nothing.
When Percy was going to drive to see grover one day his car started to drum. Suddenly he wasn't in his car anymore. He was on the side of the turnpike watching his car explode. The fates appeared next to him.
"Percy you have proven yourself worthy of our gifts" they said in unison.
Shivers ran down percy's back. That was the first time he had ever heard them speak.
"We plan to give you immortality. You will stay 17 forever."The one on the right said.
Percy didn't want immortality then and he didn't want it now. Why would the fates appear in a time like this anyway. Sure Percy had almost been blown up, but being blown up wasn't a first for him.
The fates seemed to read his mind.
"Percy you are being betrayed. Betrayed by the ones who you call family." The fates then showed him...



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You know what just to keep the story going I decided to tell you what happens next:

Percy is shown by the fates that Annabeth had tricked Leo to rewire the car by telling him it was a test for the Athena cabin.Everyone knew what was happening Except for Leo, because after defeating the giants and Gaea, Percy and Leo became close friends. Yeah fire and water being friends weird I know. So after that the fates also give leo immortality too. Knowing he would be a good person to accompany Percy when he left camp. The fates masked Percy and Leo from the gods sight so they couldn't see where they were.
Percy and Leo went to Colorado. They trained there until the fates told them otherwize.

If anyone is out there anymore watch out for FELLOFANYO or something like that. He said some really inapropriate things in the Mark of Athena*

I hope someone posts really soon. I'm getting scared no one likes this forum.

PLEASE COMMENT!

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This is only the beginning of chapter 3 I'll finish the rest tomorrow.

Chapter 3: Percy Jackson?

Jace's POV
On his first day of school Jace walked. Jace's dad had to go to a business meeting.
"This will be good for you. You could memorize how to get there even find some shortcuts!"
Truthfully all that Jace wanted was to get home and check out the attic. It had been killing him. That orb in there was drawing him toward it. He crossed the street to see his new school. It was a boulder public high school. Jace walked up the steps and stepped through the door.
The hallway was crowded. Sure, Jace had moved here, but this was also his first day of high school. He was kind of nervous about meeting his old friends from the past. Even worse: his enemy's. Jace could see the office to the right. Jace walked over as quick as he possibly could and went through the door to hand in his paper work.
"Good morning, I'm Mrs. Acacia!" the perky secretary said as soon as Jace came through the door. "You must be new to this school district completely! Do you have your paper work?" Jace walked up closer and saw that she had brown eyes and brown hair tied up in a pony tail. She looked like she was in her twenties which was surprising. Usually the secretary was a mean old lady who hated kids our age.
I greeted Mrs. Acacia and gave her the papers politely. She told me to wait in a seat next to the principals' office before orientation. Just then another kid walked through the door. He looked like he was around 17 with sea green eyes and messy black hair. Mrs. Acacia gave him the same greeting she gave me.
" Hi, my name is Percy Jackson. Nice to meet you." he said. The secretary frowned when she looked at his papers.
" 15 years old really..?" she said. Percy's eyes flashed, but Mrs. Acacia didn't seem to notice.
" Welcome to Boulder public high school. Take a seat right over there!" Was it just Jace or did she completely forget what she was just saying.
Percy walked to the seat next to Jace. He looked at him for a quick second and frowned. Then sat down and a normal look returned to his face.
"I'm guessing your new here, too" He said. He put out a hand and I shook it.


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Could someone tell me how to use itallics, bold, and underline?

I LOVE the chapter.
It was totally awesome.
Cant wait until u post again.
I hope its soon!!!!!

Um if anyone is out there i'll be posting tomorrow instead of today.Feeling kinda tired.
Hope u can understand

cool new page

This is really good post soon luv it:)

Awesome!!!!! Whoohoo, post soon!!!
And to do italics, it's [ i ] word [ / i ]
Just with out spaces in between symbols and letters. The same goes for underline and bold.
italics
bold
underline
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thanks for the support i'll post in a few hours

Yay!!!!!!
Cant wait.

sorry I had to go out with my aunt i'll finish soon!

So sorry for being late I was having gigantic writers's block
Sorry that its short
here it is

Chapter 3 continued
School is not that bad

Jace's POV
Being next to Percy made Jace have that tingly feeling. That feeling he had with the Black orb. That powerful pull was freaking Jace out.
Percy's POV
Percy was told by the fates to start going to school but he wasn't sure why. Then he saw what they meant. This kid sitting next to Percy had a strong aura. An aura of stronger than the big three. He had dark curly, red hair. It was almost black. He had golden eyes which was weird to Percy. He didn't want to deal with a Titan today.
"My name is Jace. Nice to meet you" He said nervously. Jace had a scared gleam in his eyes.
As soon as he said that the principal opened the door to his office. He was bald and had a chubby figure. He had washed out blue eyes.
"Come in. Both of you!" he said like they had done something wrong even though this was our first day. Jace and Percy got up from their seats and walked into his office.
"My name is principal Gallagher. Welcome to the school blah blah blah...Here's your schedules ."
Jace and I exchanged looks. This guy was a little grumpy.
" Now leave before I expel you on the first day of school!" Jace and I both quickly walked out the door.
Jace POV
The Secretary sent a girl named Morgan to help them with their schedule. She brought them to their classes and helped them with the work they were assigning. Jace caught her making googily eyes at Percy and every time he looked at her she blushed. Jace smirked. She heard him and got even redder.
After 3 periods they all went to lunch. Morgan had to go to the bathroom so Jace and Percy got to pick where they wanted to sit. Percy suggested a table far away from everyone else. When they walked to the table some guys on the soccer team started to glare at Jace and Percy. One guy who looked extremely angry had a jacket on that said "Lance". When Percy walked by Lance tried to trip him but Percy over powered Lance and he fell instead. At this everyone laughed except Lance's teammates and Percy. Percy just stared down at the guy like he was dirt and continued walking. Lance's face was bright red and completely angry. Jace and Percy sat down at the table. Morgan came back , but didn't sit with us. It was ok with Jace and Percy.
"You know she was staring at you." Jace said
" Yeah, I know" Percy said. He seemed deep in thought. Like there was something much more important.
Morgan's POV
"Hey guys" said Morgan.
Morgan's friends didn't even hear her. They were too busy staring at Percy and Jace. Morgan couldn't blame them they were both really good looking, but Percy looked amazing. He was wearing a leather Jacket and denim jeans. His hair was tousled in a super cute way, but what made him so amazing was the way he seemed so distance like he was thinking of something far away. Morgan knew a guy like Percy would never like her. She sighed out loud. All the girls snapped out of their trance and stared at each other. Everyone erupted in laughter.
" Morgan you are sooooooooo lucky." said one of the girls.
" Yeah, I guess." she said looking at Percy.
" What's there names" said another girl.
" The one with the dark red hair is Jace the other one with the black hair is Percy." replied Morgan
" Man Percy is HOT" said Serenity. Morgan quickly glanced at Serenity. then looked back.
" I agree, but Jace pretty cute , too" said another girl.
Ok this was becoming complete obsession.


Sorry I was having writers block, but please comment!

Post soon! I love the chap!

It was amazingly awesomely epic!!!!
I love it.
Please post again soon!!

please don't tell me that u all left!

I just started reading this and it's REALLY good! Keep it up. ;)
Please post soon! :)

yeah! Post soon!I'll post the site on other ppl's forums

Thanks ocean lover. Ok sorry but i've seen people do this on other forums. I won't post until there is at least 10 more comments.

Why do you need ten more? You already have 41. Ha jk. I hope people post on here so you can put up another chapter. This story seems really good so far.

Also I want to say thanks for placing it in Colorado, cause thats where I live. Although I live on the other side of the mountains from Boulder.

I didnt leave. I still here.
And cant wait for u to post.

Hope its soon!!!!!

Post this is really good!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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hey i just started reading your forum its really cool post soon!
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and it was oceanlover123 who put your link on my forum

I am really looking forward to u posting
i am the 8th person to comment from the chapter so only 2 people needed

^....one more actually!!! :)
Just read it all and it's awesome so post soon!!!!

You should post soon.

WOOOOOOW I go to my sister's game and go to sleep to see that My forum's on popular contentv the next day! THIS IS AWSOME. just need one person to write another comment and i'll post in the afternoon because of school.