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a sneak peak of a story im making its called storytime... do u like it?

STORYTIME
Lily… will you tell me a story before I go to bed? I guess… what story? Not a real story in a book… we can make one up! Well… ok. Yay… thank you SO much!!! Your Welcome. Oh Yeah and by the way why do you like making up stories so much with me? ….. Caitlin??? Oh… sorry I just got tired. Ok, but this story HAS to be quick. Ok. Lily, can you start. Yes.
Once upon a time, there was a little girl named Caitlin and she was magic… she could do anything she wanted to whenever she wanted. She was the luckiest girl in the world.

What just happened Lily? I have no idea… I just turned magic. Hey… maybe… everything you tell me in the story comes true. Ok Lily… can you finish the story? Yes.

She could go to different places in less than 2 seconds!

Let me try. Ok. I want to go to Florida….. OH MY GOD… is this real? Am I actually in Florida. Yes. I want to go home! Ok now where back home. Lets finish the story. Ok.

Caitlin? Are you awake? I guess she isn’t awake.
Good morning Catlin. Good morning mommy! Come on you and Lily have to get ready for school. Ok. LILY WAKE UP!!! Ok mom, no need to be harsh! Ok miss smarty pants. Really mom, isn’t that saying from the 60’s or something? Fine don’t awnser me, but I know you’re just not awnsering me because you know im right. YOU ARE NOT RIGHT! Ok. Im done. You don’t have to announce that, Lily! Ok. Caitlin you are so lucky because mom is nice to you because you’re only 10 and she thinks that just because you’re younger that you should be treated better. Ok come on Caitlin I have to walk you to school. Ok.





 rolie1 posted over a year ago
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BaybieBetty009 said:
It's ok... you know? It's got potential and all. Didn't compmletely WOW me but it's alright. :)
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thanks
rolie1 posted over a year ago
OneFoggyNight said:
I think it could evolve alittle more,dont you? Like, detail, and maybe make it a bit slower.
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ok
rolie1 posted over a year ago
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thanks 4 the tip!
rolie1 posted over a year ago
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Always a pleasure ^-^
OneFoggyNight posted over a year ago
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