First reply, yay! (I hope I'm not jumping in too early or anything...) O.o
This is my first time participating in the FWG! *waves* Hi!
I decided to take on the poetry prompt. I'm not really into "twoo wuv" or romance, but the challenge of writing something about it without those words was too fun to pass up. And the prompt fit perfectly into my idea of a good romance, so I ran with it.
The poem is mostly free-verse; no particular structure or anything fancy. Just words. I tried to make it rhyme at first (I like rhyming ones), but it sounded too forced so I dropped that. I'm not sure if it's over 40 lines or not...the words wouldn't stop coming out and I never bothered to count them... *cringes* (I hope this doesn't disqualify me from the prompt or anything. If it does, sorry!)
Anyway, hope you enjoy it! And please give me all the constructive criticism you've got! I thrive on it! =D
Love
Ours is not made of roses and candles
Or daydreams dipped in sunset's gold.
Ours is not spun of fairytale's flax
Or starry gazes to fix and hold.
For candlelight flickers and roses wither
And dreams, however sweet, will yield to dawn.
No.
Ours is the unromantic romance.
Sprawling, stubborn, untidy,
Covered in bruises and grass stains.
But
A soft and subtle warmth creeps in,
Slowly,
To temper the rough edges.
We swallow back fear to taste the change;
And with clouts and embraces applied when necessary,
We steer our friend-ship into deeper waters
For ours is the journey
Comprised of pain and promises,
Tears and joys,
Arguments, denials,
Reluctant realizations, awkward steps,
And a few quiet moments
To drink in the delight of
Knowing another Self.
Ours is the dance
Of blindness becoming sight,
Brokenness being healed,
Strength filling weakness;
Two wills
Entwining together
To be forged, ever stronger, into
One.
And ours is the mountain, firm and forever;
Standing through the storms of Summer
And the snows of Winter,
Taking the beauty,
The glory,
And the hardship
That comes with every season.
Thanks for starting this writer's group and coming up with the awesome prompts, harold! (And anyone else who was involved!) I can't wait to see what everyone else has up their sleeves. =)
This is my first time participating in the FWG! *waves* Hi!
I decided to take on the poetry prompt. I'm not really into "twoo wuv" or romance, but the challenge of writing something about it without those words was too fun to pass up. And the prompt fit perfectly into my idea of a good romance, so I ran with it.
The poem is mostly free-verse; no particular structure or anything fancy. Just words. I tried to make it rhyme at first (I like rhyming ones), but it sounded too forced so I dropped that. I'm not sure if it's over 40 lines or not...the words wouldn't stop coming out and I never bothered to count them... *cringes* (I hope this doesn't disqualify me from the prompt or anything. If it does, sorry!)
Anyway, hope you enjoy it! And please give me all the constructive criticism you've got! I thrive on it! =D
Love
Ours is not made of roses and candles
Or daydreams dipped in sunset's gold.
Ours is not spun of fairytale's flax
Or starry gazes to fix and hold.
For candlelight flickers and roses wither
And dreams, however sweet, will yield to dawn.
No.
Ours is the unromantic romance.
Sprawling, stubborn, untidy,
Covered in bruises and grass stains.
But
A soft and subtle warmth creeps in,
Slowly,
To temper the rough edges.
We swallow back fear to taste the change;
And with clouts and embraces applied when necessary,
We steer our friend-ship into deeper waters
For ours is the journey
Comprised of pain and promises,
Tears and joys,
Arguments, denials,
Reluctant realizations, awkward steps,
And a few quiet moments
To drink in the delight of
Knowing another Self.
Ours is the dance
Of blindness becoming sight,
Brokenness being healed,
Strength filling weakness;
Two wills
Entwining together
To be forged, ever stronger, into
One.
And ours is the mountain, firm and forever;
Standing through the storms of Summer
And the snows of Winter,
Taking the beauty,
The glory,
And the hardship
That comes with every season.
Thanks for starting this writer's group and coming up with the awesome prompts, harold! (And anyone else who was involved!) I can't wait to see what everyone else has up their sleeves. =)
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